文/刘宝彩/天津
“模板套作”写作英语的“千胞胎万胞胎”而被判卷老师扣分数降档次的后果是学生最初所不知的，如此把“机械化”而“好看不好吃”的模板写作英语≈（约等于）当作“正根”拉动学生英语写作是令人遗憾的，是难以真正地提升英语写作能力和水平。
学生真正地写作出得高分的英语作文是源于把思维逻辑当作阳光和空气之需要应用于英语写作中的。英语思维逻辑写出质量升分数高，以至得满分的英语作文。
为此看看以“从外国人喜欢生活在中国，看中国改革开放”为题写给TOM询问想生活在中国的回函之英语写作文如下，其写作英语背景提示：
你曾留学国外学校的国外同学Tom及其朋友想来中国生活，你告诉他们1.中国现状；2.吃、住、行的情况；3.消费支出使用移动支付工具很便捷等信息。
正式英语h作如下：
Hello Tom, My classmate,
In reply to you on your e-mail days before expressing the hope that you together with you friends would stay for living in China, I write you a letter by e-mail telling you about information on foreign friends whose views are to discuss or share about to live or to be at work in China, reportedly. Its up-to-date development makes Chinese cities modernly and increasingly attractive to foreigners, economically and socially. They are interested in locally excellently-accepted custom and practice looking suitable to their desire.
They are well in the comfortably-living condition that proves convenient for them to live a life, keeps them safe physically and mentally and appears pleased by their confidence in China, where people are always friendly towards foreigners going on the really enjoyable trip to interesting and sight-seeing places at leisure time to their delight.
So pleasantly will foreign friends live in China that, seen to buy them goods as garments being good in design and quality and cheap in price, they enjoy having something delicious to eat well healthily. For these, they feel it convenient for them to pay money by Ali-pay in use of mobile-phone rather than in cash.
This helps them approach to share joy not only at keeping them convenient in daily life, but watching Chinese Square Dancing become immensely favorable with foreign friends. Taichi and Chinese GONGFU are with them, too.
Compared with these, an on-water-sporting game is interesting to foreigners, for example, the personally-driving cruiser going on the large lake in Water Park, Tianjin, China. Their stay in China enables them to think it safe to walk up street towards home at 2:00 in the morning, without the fear about special crime involving. With them Chinese people are friendly very genuinely. So are policemen, and they are not possibly with a foreigner who is charged with crime, of course.
All local people inclusive of you as foreigners living legally in China would buy you bicycle-sharing service that is low in price and excellent in quality. You find it convenient to a tourist who take a trip from one sightseeing place to another by high-speed train, that travels from Beijing to Guangzhou, from Shanghai to Tibet, and Nanjing to Chengdu or Guilin, etc. This is to do without having been made too much expensive in your cost.
The good time lasts days, months and years when the delicious dishes are to serve greatly excellently such as hot-pot food. Arriving at a city, you would take a taxi conveniently by mobile phone to go where you would. You are allowed to pay money, by Ali-pay app, not in cash if any, for doing some shopping locally.
Having delivered to you by express mail, goods are regarded as being good in quality, after purchase. This brings daily-life-living cost not to get increasingly expensive too much.
As they are already prepared to believe, most foreigners here would like to acquire a lot knowledge about the Chinese language to enjoy living in China, where Chinese cities are of most modern internationalization with high-store buildings here and there.
I look forward to your living in China in the coming days.
Yours Sincerely,
Bao-cai, LIU
One of your classmates
上述英语作文中文大意是：
Tom老同学，你好！
现回复你日前关于表示希望你和你的朋友们留在中国生活的邮件，我写邮件函告诉你们我所了解到的国外朋友讨论或分享他们在中国生活或工作看法的信息。中国现代化的发展让中国各个城市在现代经济和社会方面，对外国人们越来越有非常大的吸引力了。他们对当地很好的大众接受的习惯很感兴趣，所以吻合其愿望。
他们很好地适合于这种舒适生活的环境中，让其生活便利、人身和精神有安全感，以及对中国很有信心。中国人对外国人们总是友好的，因此外国人在中国真的快乐地观光或游览很多有兴趣的名胜古迹地方，度过休闲愉快的时光。
国外朋友之所以愉快地生活在中国，是因为购买如服装的商品款式和质量好、价格廉，他们还享受吃健康美食，在购买商品和服务后便捷地使用手机移动支付宝结账，不用现金结账。
因此帮助他们很快分享不仅让其保持生活便捷的快乐，而且还观看广场舞备受外国人喜爱，同样太极和中国功夫也受到喜爱。
相比较这些,一项水上运动游戏令外国人感兴趣，如：个人驾驶游艇航行在中国天津水上公园宽阔的湖面上。他们在中国生活使其认为有安全感，比如半夜两点回家走在大街上仍是安全的，没有相关的罪犯情况（出现）。 中国人对他们真诚友好，警察也是友好的,当然，警察对某外国人犯罪就不可能友好了。
包括合法在中国居住的外国人和中国人的所有人能感觉到可以购买物美价廉骑行共享单车的服务。也会发现很便利地乘坐高铁从一个风光游览地方去另一旅游地，比如从北京到广州，从上海到西藏，从南京到成都或桂林等，这当中成本价不是很高的。
这样的好时光，天天过、月月过、年年过，期间吃到极其美味的食物，如火锅。你，每到一个城市，可以方便用手机叫出租车带你去你想去的地方；在当地购买东西用手机移动支付宝支付，不用现金，如不愿用现金的话。
买商品质量也很好，快递送到手也很便捷，日常生活费用不是渐高的。
这里的多数外国人认为，为了在中国居住愿意学习更多汉语言知识，因为中国各个城市高楼林立具有现代国际化城市的特征。
我期待着你们未来到中国生活居住。
谨上
刘宝彩，你的老同学
从上述英语作文可以看出：写作文有话可说，没有凑字数之感觉。之所以会感到思考得非常深入，是因为分析深层次原因便有开阔思路，话说不停如泉涌不停。
思考写作话题之原因和结果——分析话题产生的原因及其结果——解决这个因果问题，思路自然会打开，如此写出有广度和深度英语优秀文章。当然汉语的文章就更不用说了。
总结：
上述英语作文：写作之前不能向学生提出使用什么什么语法，用上什么什么好词、好句、模板等的要求，而只能要求学生围绕“从外国人喜欢生活在中国”话题，深挖其原因，即：在“为什么喜欢生活在中国？”的问题上让学生们多多思考（如1.中国现状；2.吃、住、行情况；3.消费支出使用很便捷的移动支付工具等）给于学生启发，帮助学生说得清清楚楚就可以了。
所以写作之前根本不要给学生讲模板句，所谓“万能句”，例如以下句：
1.The reason why + 句子… is that + 句子(…的原因是…)
2.This phenomenon exists for a number of reasons. First,…Second,…Third，…（这一现象存在有很多原因的，第一…第二…第三…）
3. For one thing,… For another thing，… = On the one hand,…On the other hand…（一方面…另一方面…）
4. I quite agree with the statement that…The reasons are chiefly as follows.（我十分赞同这一论述，即…其主要原因如下）。
这四个“万能句”显然是“凑字数”的虚的东西，假如运用于上述英语作文是根本无法“插入使用”的，是废句的。
假如上述英语作文，一些读者认为是好的英语作文，那么当作“范文”或使用的“词句”认为是优秀的提炼出来，当作“模板”行吗？答案是否定的，这么说的道理是:世界上根本就不存在“范文”和“模板”因为一个人有一个想法，唯尽量挖掘自己的想法才是，即“量身定制的”，所以“岂能让“好看”的“模板”式英语写作法100%控制住学生英语思维写作英语”之道理就在于此！唯英语思维为高分英语写作法而少有“模板范文”的英语写作得高分。
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